Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
The failure of marriage occurs between two people not one.
So woman can chose their life among many kind of marriage methods.
My life is not belong other\'s life although they are my family.
Broken marriage is just accident.
So woman have to be independent from their husband and children.
They need to do something which is kind of hobby,enjoyment and studying during the marriage.
We shouldn\'t think I sacrificed for someone.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [Name]!
I will not say much here because you are more experienced than I am. I guess I would just have to learn from you and the married couples that surround me. Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
Aki~
The failure of marriage occurs between two people, not one.
>>> CORRECT!
So woman can chose their life among many kind of marriage methods.
>>> So a woman can choose their life among many kinds of marriage methods.
My life is not belong other\'s life although they are my family.
>>> My life does not belong to other\'s life although they are my family.
Broken marriage is just accident.
>>> A broken marriage is just an accident.
So woman have to be independent from their husband and children.
>>> So a woman has to be independent from their husband and children.
They need to do something which is kind of hobby,enjoyment and studying during the marriage.
>>> They need to do something which is a kind of hobby, enjoyment, and studying during the marriage.
We shouldn\'t think I sacrificed for someone.
>>> We shouldn\'t think to sacrificed for someone.
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