homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK: What’s your go-to activity when you’re hanging out with friends?
When I play with my friends, I usually go to a cafe.
I like to chat with them while eating sweet desserts in a cafe.
When I meet a friend who likes to play games, I also play games in the PC room.
Eating snacks while playing games relieves stress.
강사 첨삭
Hi Isabel! You’ve done a great job of expressing how you enjoy spending time with your friends. Your writing is clear and shows a lot of personality, which makes it easy for readers to connect with you. Just a couple of small adjustments helped make your ideas even smoother. Keep up the great work, and don’t hesitate to add more details or emotions in the future, it will make your writing even more engaging. You’re doing really well. Keep it up!
~ T. Lia
When I play with my friends, I usually go to a cafe.
>> When I hang out with my friends, we usually go to a cafe.
I like to chat with them while eating sweet desserts in a cafe.
>> I enjoy chatting with them while having sweet desserts at the cafe.
When I meet a friend who likes to play games, I also play games in the PC room.
>> CORRECT or
>> When I meet a friend who enjoys gaming, we also play games at the PC room.
Eating snacks while playing games relieves stress.
>> CORRECT or
>> Eating snacks while gaming helps me relieve stress.
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