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2025-04-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lia

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Things inside the room In my room, there is a bed, a desk, a bookshelf and two closet cabinets. Position of things Next to the my bed is window. How you perceive your room I consider my room as My own shelter.

강사 첨삭

Hi Isabel. Your writing gives a nice and personal glimpse into your space. Calling your room a “shelter” shows how important it is to you. It’s more than just a place to s[이름]p, it’s where you feel safe and at peace. Great job expressing that feeling! Keep it up. You’re improving in both clarity and creativity.

~ T. Lia

Things inside the room
In my room, there is a bed, a desk, a bookshelf and two closet cabinets.
>> In my room, there is a bed, a desk, a bookshelf, and two closet cabinets.

Position of things
Next to the my bed is window.
>> Next to my bed is a window.

How you perceive your room
I consider my room as My own shelter.
>> I consider my room my own shelter.

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