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2025-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Shay

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I think the best tourist attraction is artificial beach in Australia. It is very unique because it is not a pool and not a real beach! I saw the beach for the first time and it was really nice. Many people visit the place and enjoy with their familly and friends. I loved the relieved mood in that place. And in my country, I think the best tourist attraction is Jeju island. There are not only many trendy restaurants but also many traditional restaurant. I think they have old and new cultures. So tourist can enjoy all of them. And Jeju island\'s scenery is very great because they have many beaches and a mountain.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
That beach is fascinating. 
_T. SHAY^^
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I think the best tourist attraction is artificial beach in Australia. 
>>I think the best tourist attraction is the artificial beach in Australia. 
It is very unique because it is not a pool and not a real beach! 
>>Correct
OR: It is very special because it is neither a pool nor a beach.
I saw the beach for the first time and it was really nice. 
>>I saw the beach for the first time, and it was really nice.
OR: I was able to visit it, and it was really awesome.
Many people visit the place and enjoy with their familly and friends. 
>>Many people visit the place and enjoy with their family and friends.
OR: Many people visit the place with their family and friends.
I loved the relieved mood in that place.
>>I love that place because I felt relieved after visiting it.
And in my country, I think the best tourist attraction is Jeju island. 
>>Correct
OR: In Korea, I think the best tourist attraction is Jeju Island.
There are not only many trendy restaurants but also many traditional restaurant. 
>>There are not only many trendy restaurants but also many traditional restaurants. 
I think they have old and new cultures. 
>>Correct
OR: I think they have a mixture of old and new cultures.
So tourist can enjoy all of them. 
>>So, tourists can enjoy all of them.
And Jeju island\'s scenery is very great because they have many beaches and a mountain.
>>And Jeju Island\'s scenery is very great because they have many beaches and mountains.

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