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2025-05-20 · 첨삭 강사 Shay

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I want to try jiu jitsu because I was impressed when I saw a phrase which promote jiu jitsu. It says jiu iitsu is an only exercise that weak people can beat strong people. I want to protect myself from bad people. But it\'s too expensive to learn because of uniform. There are many people who hurts when they\'re learning jiu jitsu, so I scared of trying jiu jitsu. Maybe I might just think about jiu jitsu not try it. But someday every condition is good to learn jiu jitsu then I\'ll try it!

강사 첨삭

Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
That\'s really interesting. 
_T. SHAY^^
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I want to try jiu jitsu because I was impressed when I saw a phrase which promote jiu jitsu. 
>>I want to try jiu-jitsu because I was impressed when I saw a phrase which promotes jiu-jitsu.
It says jiu iitsu is an only exercise that weak people can beat strong people. 
>>It says, \"jiu-jitsu is the only form of exercise where the weak people can beat strong people.\"
I want to protect myself from bad people. 
>>Correct
OR: I want to be able to fight for myself from bad people.
But it\'s too expensive to learn because of uniform. 
>>The thing is, it\'s too expensive because of the uniform.
There are many people who hurts when they\'re learning jiu jitsu, so I scared of trying jiu jitsu. 
>>Also, there are many people who get hurt when they learn jiu-jitsu, so I\'m scared of trying jiu-jitsu.
Maybe I might just think about jiu jitsu not try it. 
>>I\'m just considering it, but I\'m not going to try it. 
But someday every condition is good to learn jiu jitsu then I\'ll try it!
>>But someday if I am given the chance to learn and if my body is ready, then I\'ll try. 

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