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When I was 10 years old, I just mixed rice with some other ingredient. It was my first dish without using fire. Getting older, I could use fire and I cooked rice with kimchi by frying. After I bought an oven, I made a cookie by cookie mix. I just put all of them in the bowl and mixed it. In Korea, there is a tradition for sharing stick cookie with chocolate in 11,November. People usually bought complete product but I made stick cookie personally from the first.
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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
You must really like baking. ^^
_T. SHAY^^
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When I was 10 years old, I just mixed rice with some other ingredient.
Thank you for sharing.
You must really like baking. ^^
_T. SHAY^^
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When I was 10 years old, I just mixed rice with some other ingredient.
>>When I was 10 years old, I just mixed rice with some other ingredients.
It was my first dish without using fire.
>>Correct
OR: It was the first dish I prepared without really cooking.
Getting older, I could use fire and I cooked rice with kimchi by frying.
It was my first dish without using fire.
>>Correct
OR: It was the first dish I prepared without really cooking.
Getting older, I could use fire and I cooked rice with kimchi by frying.
>>When I got older, I learned to use fire so I cooked rice with kimchi by frying.
OR: As I got older, I learned to use fire so I cooked kimchi fried rice.
OR: As I got older, I learned to use fire so I cooked kimchi fried rice.
After I bought an oven, I made a cookie by cookie mix.
>>After I bought an oven, I made a cookie using a cookie mix.
I just put all of them in the bowl and mixed it.
>>Correct
OR: I just put all the ingredients in the bowl and mixed it.
OR: I just put all the ingredients in the bowl and mixed it.
In Korea, there is a tradition for sharing stick cookie with chocolate in 11,November.
>>In Korea, there is a tradition of sharing chocolate-covered stick cookie on November 11.
People usually bought complete product but I made stick cookie personally from the first.
People usually bought complete product but I made stick cookie personally from the first.
>>People usually buy the finished product but I make my own stick cookie.
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