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[ESSAY]
In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> Have you ever used alcohol to help you overcome fear?
I used alcohol to reconcile with my father. As every family have a little bit problem, and also we have. When I matriculate at a university, we drinks alcohol with previous history. In my case, that feeling was not about fear but I needed courage and alcohol helped to talk about it.
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Have you ever used alcohol to help you overcome fear?
I used alcohol to reconcile with my father. As every family have a little bit problem, and also we have.
>>> Alcohol helped me reconcile with my father. Like all families, we have our share of issues.
When I matriculate at a university, we drinks alcohol with previous history. In my case, that feeling was not about fear but I needed courage and alcohol helped to talk about it.
>>> When I started university, drinking alcohol was a tradition. For me, it wasn’t about fear - I just needed courage, and alcohol helped me open up.
>>> OR: Drinking was a ritual when I entered university. I didn’t drink out of fear, but for courage, and in those moments, alcohol helped me relax and share my thoughts freely.
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