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2025-06-16 · 첨삭 강사 Shay

학생이 쓴 원문

I think that you forget writing the homework on Friday. So I just write a free diary what I did on Saturday. I wanted to get up late on Saturday because I always get up early every weekdays. But my biological clock was already changed and I just got up only one hour later than usual. So I felt upset and I tried to s[이름]p again. Finally, I got up as late as possible and started the housework to catch up on. And I went to the swimming pool to practice the breaststroke. After swimming, I went to the academy in the same building for doing an additional chemistry class. I felt so tired when I finished all of them which I had to do. And I want to give a gift to myself. So I had chicken delivered with beer. It was a really nice day!

강사 첨삭

Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
I actually wrote it below. 
I just didn\'t write it after the feedback.
_T. SHAY^^
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I think that you forget writing the homework on Friday. 
>>I think you forgot to give a writing homework on Friday.
So I just write a free diary what I did on Saturday.
>>So, I just wrote a free diary about what I did on Saturday.
I wanted to get up late on Saturday because I always get up early every weekdays. 
>>Correct
OR: I wanted to s[이름]p in on Saturday because I always get up early on weekdays. 
But my biological clock was already changed and I just got up only one hour later than usual. 
>>But my body clock was already changed, and I just got up only one hour later than usual.
So I felt upset and I tried to s[이름]p again. 
>>Correct
OR: So I got pissed and tried to get back to s[이름]p.
Finally, I got up as late as possible and started the housework to catch up on. 
>>Finally, I got up as late as possible and started catching up on the housework. 
And I went to the swimming pool to practice the breaststroke. 
>>Correct
OR: After that, I went to the swimming pool to practice the breaststroke.
After swimming, I went to the academy in the same building for doing an additional chemistry class. 
>>After swimming, I went to the academy in the same building to take an additional chemistry class. 
I felt so tired when I finished all of them which I had to do. 
>>I felt so tired when I finished all things that I had to do.
And I want to give a gift to myself. So I had chicken delivered with beer. 
>>And I want to reward myself, so I had chicken and beer delivered.
It was a really nice day!
>>Correct
OR: It was a great day!

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