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When I was 18, I loved boy group \"BTOB\". And they held on their concert in winter season. My friend\'s friend, in other word, an acquaintance got two tickets and looked for a person who goes with her. She already knew that I loved BTOB and she suggested me to go to the concert. I really hoped to go there, but I thought it was very important period to study and I didn\'t have confidence to persuade my parents. So I gave up to go there and just waited next concert after entering a university. But there were no concert after entering a university because one of members went to the military. I really regretted those choice in that time.
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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
You must\'ve felt really bad.
It was like the only chance you had to attend their concert.
_T. SHAY^^
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When I was 18, I loved boy group \"BTOB\".
Thank you for sharing.
You must\'ve felt really bad.
It was like the only chance you had to attend their concert.
_T. SHAY^^
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When I was 18, I loved boy group \"BTOB\".
>>When I was 18, I loved the boy group \"BTOB\".
And they held on their concert in winter season.
>>And they held their concert during the winter season.
My friend\'s friend, in other words an acquaintance got two tickets and looked for a person who goes with her.
My friend\'s friend, in other words an acquaintance got two tickets and looked for a person who goes with her.
>>My friend\'s friend--in other words, an acquaintance--got two tickets and was looking for a person to go with her.
She already knew that I loved BTOB and she suggested me to go to the concert.
>>She already knew that I loved BTOB, and she suggested that I go to the concert.
I really hoped to go there, but I thought it was very important period to study and I didn\'t have confidence to persuade my parents.
>>I really wanted to go, but I thought it was an important time to study, and I didn\'t have the confidence to persuade my parents.
OR: Although I really hoped to go, I felt it was too important a time to study and wasn\'t confident about persuading my parents.
So I gave up to go there and just waited next concert after entering a university.
OR: Although I really hoped to go, I felt it was too important a time to study and wasn\'t confident about persuading my parents.
So I gave up to go there and just waited next concert after entering a university.
>>So I gave up on going there and just waited for the next concert after entering the university.
But there were no concert after entering a university because one of members went to the military.
But there were no concert after entering a university because one of members went to the military.
>>But there were no concerts after entering the university because one of members went to the military.
I really regretted those choice in that time.
>>I really regretted that choice at that time.
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