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I think smoking people need to time a rest time. So they are smoking and relax their mind.
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Hi, Na [이름]! I guess you\'re right --- smoking is their way to take a break and relax for a bit. However, we also should keep in mind that it’s not the healthiest way to unwind, and there are better alternatives for stress relief.
~T. Jenna
I think smoking people need to time a rest time.
>>I think smoking people need a rest time.
So they are smoking and relax their mind.
>>So, they smoke to relax their mind.
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I think people smoke because they need a break. They smoke to relax their mind.
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>> I think people smoke when they need to rest. Smoking helps them relax their mind.
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