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2025-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Ash

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Children usually love sweet foods. Would\' you allow your child to eat sweets? How important is the food that children eat? Does it have to be healthy? I don\'t think so. Sometimes I think that need to eat sweets. because sweets things is good for concentration. sure, Too much is harmful I think that I want to tell you everything about what children love.

강사 첨삭

[이름] [이름], 

Thanks for sharing your thoughts. 

-Teacher Ash


I don\'t think so.
>> CORRECT!

Sometimes I think that need to eat sweets.
>> I think children need to eat sweets at times. 

because sweets things is good for concentration.
>> It is because sweet is good for concentration. 

sure, Too much is harmful
>> However, too much sweet is harmful. 

I think that I want to tell you everything about what children love.
>> I can share about what children likes to eat in our discussion. 

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