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I want have much time. Because If I have much time, I can work hard and then I had a much money.Also I can play with my family and friends.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, Su [이름]!^^
Depending on the job, working longer hours can be harmful.
Thank you so much for finding time to accomplish your homework. I have made some modifications.
I will see you in our next class. Have a good night!
__T. Mayleen :)
I want have much time. Because If I have much time, I can work hard and then I had a much money.
>>> I choose to have more time since it will allow me to work longer hours and earn more money.
Also I can play with my family and friends.
>>> Also, I can play with my family and friends.
>>> OR: I can play with my friends and family as well.
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