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2025-09-18 · 첨삭 강사 Shay

학생이 쓴 원문

Yes. Because we can do social acitivies online now. Some people have social activities on game sites, and they talk together through their headsets. And I know that some club for miracle morning check their waking up on Zoom. They don\'t need to meet offline. We also do a teamwork on Zoom. How convenient world is!

강사 첨삭

Hi, Megan^^

Yes, indeed!
It\'s totally different now compared to 10 years ago.
_T. SHAY^^
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Yes. Because we can do social acitivies online now.
>>Yes because we can do social activities online now.

OR: Yes online platforms now allow us to engage in social activities.
Some people have social activities on game sites, and they talk together through their headsets.

>>Some people participate in social activities on gaming sites, and communicate through their headsets.

OR: People can have social interactions on gaming sites, talking together via headsets.
And I know that some club for miracle morning check their waking up on Zoom.

>>And I know that some Miracle Morning clubs check in on Zoom to see if members woke up.

OR: I also know that some Miracle Morning clubs use Zoom to track members\' wake-up time.
They don\'t need to meet offline.

>>Correct
OR: They can meet without being physically together.
We also do a teamwork on Zoom.
>>We also do teamwork on Zoom.

OR: We also collaborate as a team on Zoom.
How convenient world is!
>>How convenient the world is!

OR: What a convenient world we live in!

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