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2025-09-29 · 첨삭 강사 Shay

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Yes. Definitely! As I was child, I dreamed of small things or huge things. For example, I hoped that I could buy and eat a whole cake. Now, I can do it anytime, if I want to. And I used to think when I lived by myself, I would have all baking tools. I realized it was hard to achieve that. My bucket lists might be change when my interest changed. One of my bucket lists is using business seat when I travel abroad. If I already achieve it, then my bucket list will change. Or if my interest change from traveling to others, it also change.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
I always find children\'s wishes or dreams interesting. 
It\'s so pure, simple, and innocent.
_T. SHAY^^
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Yes. Definitely!
>>Correct
As I was child, I dreamed of small things or huge things. 
>>When I was a child, I dreamed of both small and big things.
OR: As a child, my imagination ranged from simple dreams to grand ambitions. 
For example, I hoped that I could buy and eat a whole cake. 
>>Correct
OR: For instance, I used to hope that one day I could buy an entire cake and enjoy it all by myself. 
Now, I can do it anytime, if I want to. 
>>Correct
OR: Now I can do it anything I want.
OR: These days, I can eat a whole cake whenever I feel like it.
And I used to think when I lived by myself, I would have all baking tools. 
>>And I used to think that when I lived by myself, I would have all baking tools I needed. 
I realized it was hard to achieve that.
>>Correct
OR: I came to understand that it was hard to make that happen.
My bucket lists might be change when my interest changed.
>>
My bucket lists might change when my interests change.
One of my bucket lists is using business seat when I travel abroad.
>>
One thing on my bucket list is to use a business-class seat when I travel abroad.
If I already achieve it, then my bucket list will change.
>>Correct
OR: Once I achieve it, my bucket list will change.
Or if my interest change from traveling to others, it also change.
>>
Or if my interest change from traveling to something else, my bucket list will change too.

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