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2025-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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I think that it is very important to have dream and goal. Before married, I want to grow up myself. But after married and have children, I want to my family grow up together. My husbamd will pass the exam. My children will have safety and comfortable job and their family. I c[이름]r up their\'s dream and goal. I\'m happy to think about my dream and future. So I live life hard.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, [이름] [이름]. I hope you\'re having a good evening. You also show a good understanding of sentence structure and can communicate your thoughts clearly. You’re at a good stage where regular practice will really make a difference. Keep it up!^^ ~Teacher Jane 


I think that it is very important to have dream and goal. 
>> I think that it is very important to have a dream and a goal. 

Before married, I want to grow up myself. 
>> Before getting married, I wanted to grow old alone. 

But after married and have children, I want to my family grow up together.
>> But after getting married and having children, I wanted to grow with my family. 

My husbamd will pass the exam. 
>> My husband will pass the exam. / I see my husband passing the exam. 

My children will have safety and comfortable job and their family.
>> My children will have safe and comfortable jobs, and have their own families. / I see my children getting safe and comfortable jobs, and having their own families. 

I c[이름]r up their\'s dream and goal. 
>> I will c[이름]r them on for their dreams and goals. 

I\'m happy to think about my dream and future.
>> CORRECT 

So I live life hard.
>> CORRECT 

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