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2025-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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If we have a 4-day a week many students and workers will be happy. But school schedule will be longer then now. Many worker spend more time in office.

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If we have a 4-day a week many students and workers will be happy. 
>>> If we have a 4-day week, many students and workers will be happy.
>>> OR: Reducing the week to four days could boost happiness among students and employees.

But school schedule will be longer then now. 
>>> But the school schedule will be longer than it is now.
>>> OR: However, the school day might be extended to make up for the shorter week.

Many worker spend more time in office.
>>> Many workers spend more time in the office.
>>> OR: A lot of employees spend extra hours at the office.

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