homework
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Do you think job stability is more important than job satisfaction? Why?
I think that satisfaction is important. Satisfaction leads to stability. When I feel satisfaction, I have shown ability. sometimes I think that I don\'t know this network work is right, wrong for me. sometimes I don\'t want to work about network. but I did this network work.
I started because my father. Father said, You must work for the telecommunications sector. I said I want a broadcasting job.
father said, No, You can work the IT, if you work for IT, you have a lot of money. and you get a technology. so you have to be happy.
so I choose the network in IT.
강사 첨삭
[이름] [이름],
father said, No, You can work the IT, if you work for IT, you have a lot of money. and you get a technology.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
See you later!
-Teacher Ash
I think that satisfaction is important.
>> I think satisfaction is more important.
Satisfaction leads to stability.
>> CORRECT!
When I feel satisfaction, I have shown ability.
>> When I feel satisfied, it means I have accomplished something.
sometimes I think that I don\'t know this network work is right, wrong for me.
>>I sometimes think if this network is the right field for me.
sometimes I don\'t want to work about network. but I did this network work.
>> I sometimes don\'t want to work in this field, but I have chosen it.
I started because my father.
>> I\'ve chosen this career because of my father.
Father said, You must work for the telecommunications sector.
>> My father said I have to work in the telecommunication sector.
I said I want a broadcasting job.
>> I said, I want a broadcasting job.
father said, No, You can work the IT, if you work for IT, you have a lot of money.
>> My father disagreed and told me to work in IT so I can make lots of money and free tech services.
so you have to be happy.
>> So, I have to be happy.
so I choose the network in IT.
>> That is why I chose to work in the telecom industry.
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