homework
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How does mandatory military service shape young men’s identity and adulthood in South Korea?
In case of men, we naturally thought that we should go to the military when we become adults.
so we enjoy the drink before we go to the army.
Of course, my son is no exception. so I worried. because accidents sometimes happen in the military.
when I was working in the army, new military guy incident of desertion..
finally the police arrested him at a nearby pension.
강사 첨삭
[이름] [이름],
Thanks for sharing your thoughts on this.
-Teacher Ash
In case of men, we naturally thought that we should go to the military when we become adults.
>> When we become adult in Korea, we naturally thought that we should go to the military when we become adults.
so we enjoy the drink before we go to the army.
>> That is why we enjoy drinking with our friends before going to the army.
Of course, my son is no exception.
>> CORRECT!
so I worried. because accidents sometimes happen in the military.
>> So, I am worried because accidents can happen in the military.
when I was working in the army, new military guy incident of desertion..
>> When I was working in the military, I heard of a guy who deserted the military training.
finally the police arrested him at a nearby pension.
>> The police eventually arrested him at a nearby pension house.
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