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2025-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Polly

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1. When my daughter was young, I often imagined that we are going skiing together someday when she grew up. finally became reality and we went skiing together, it made me happy. 2. No I haven’t had any experiences like that yet.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Ivan!
I love that you shared a personal memory about skiing with your daughter! It really shows your excitement and happiness. Your sentences are much clearer now. Next time, you could add a little detail about the skiing trip itself — maybe what you enjoyed most — to make your writing even more vivid. Great work!
~Teacher Polly

1. When my daughter was young, I often imagined that we are going skiing together someday when she grew up.
>>When my daughter was young, I often imagined that we would go skiing together someday when she grew up. 

finally became reality and we went skiing together, it made me happy.
>>It finally became a reality, and we went skiing together, which made me very happy.

2. No I haven’t had any experiences like that yet.
>>CORRECT

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