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2025-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Ash

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Do you think company events during Christmas are necessary? Why or why not? How can companies make Christmas events or year -end celebration more inclusive and enjoyable for everyone? I am not need to celebrate for Christmas in Company. I think it is important to spent time with my family for Christmas. I think Companies need to be more [이름]ing for worker. more benefit more rest for employee. but can\'t it. because company don\'t want to make employee loose their dignity.

강사 첨삭

[이름] [이름], 

Thanks for sharing your ideas here. 
See you later!

-Teacher Ash

I am not need to celebrate for Christmas in Company.
>> I don\'t need to celebrate Christmas in the company. 

 I think it is important to spent time with my family for Christmas.
>> I think it is more important to celebrate it with my family. 

I think Companies need to be more [이름]ing for worker. more benefit more rest for employee.
>> I think companies need to give more benefits and vacation leaves to their employees.

but can\'t it. because company don\'t want to make employee loose their dignity.
>> However, it is not possible because they don\'t want employees to become lazy. 

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