Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Onece day a girl was runnig around her garden then she spoted a very preetybird
she called her friend who was a scientist she said it is a really rare bird.so they went closer but the bird was realy sencitive and went inside her house extremely fast!and the bird went to her cat they thouthgt the cat will eat the bird.but the cat thoutght the bird was a new pet that got adoppeted by her and accepted the bird. so she lived with the rarest bird.----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------THE END----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
4. accept
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Thank you for s[이름]g! I really enjoyed reading your creative story. It shows imagination and a sense of surprise, especially with the twist that the cat accepted the rare bird instead of eating it. That ending makes the story feel warm and hopeful.
Please review the corrections. Remember that clear sentence structure and correct word choice make your ideas easier to follow.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
1. Onece day a girl was runnig around her garden then she spoted a very preetybird
-- Once, a girl was running around her garden when she spotted a very pretty bird.
2. she called her friend who was a scientist she said it is a really rare bird.so they went closer but the bird was realy sencitive and went inside her house extremely fast!
-- She called her friend, who was a scientist. Her friend said it was a really rare bird. They went closer, but the bird was very sensitive and flew inside her house extremely fast!
3. and the bird went to her cat they thouthgt the cat will eat the bird.
-- The bird went to her cat, and they thought the cat would eat the bird.
4. but the cat thoutght the bird was a new pet that got adoppeted by her and accepted the bird.
-- But the cat thought the bird was a new pet adopted by her and accepted the bird.
5. so she lived with the rarest bird.
-- So she lived with the rarest bird.
6. THE END
-- CORRECT.
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