Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Coupang had an issue that revealed the personal information of Korean customers. However, they made little effort to compensate them. This is because they have numerous subcontractors and stakeholders in Korea; they believe that consumers cannot easily take action against them due to these complex entanglements. I think they have to make a sincere effort for Korean customers.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Ho [이름]!
Thank you for expressing your thoughts through writing. They are written well, so I just suggested a sentence that is commonly used by everyone, the word \"leakage.\" Anyway, big companies like Coupang should be mindful of confidentiality as people trust them so much. Once a glass has a crack, you won\'t be able to repair it, but to replace it.
See you in class tomorrow!
Aki~
Coupang had an issue that revealed the personal information of Korean customers.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> Coupang had an issue with the leakage of customers\' personal information.
However, they made little effort to compensate them.
>>> CORRECT!
This is because they have numerous subcontractors and stakeholders in Korea; they believe that consumers cannot easily take action against them due to these complex entanglements.
>>> CORRECT!
I think they have to make a sincere effort for Korean customers.
>>> CORRECT!
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