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2026-04-22 · 첨삭 강사 Ash

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What should companies do after a data breach? Is it okay for companies to collect user data to improve services? Why or why not? companies have to strength security. and they need to prepare new security solution. and must be appologize for people. No I always disagree. because It only use resource. I am not participating in service improvement. Company have to develop for improve services. Customer just got a damage.

강사 첨삭

[이름] [이름],

Thanks for sharing your opinions about this topic.

See you tomorrow.

-Teacher Ash

companies have to strength security. and they need to prepare new security solution. and must be appologize for people.

>> Companies have to strengthen their security by preparing a security solution and must apologize to the people when a security breach occurs.

No I always disagree. because It only use resource.

>> I disagree because it is only a resource.

I am not participating in service improvement.

>> I am not participating in any service improvement.

Company have to develop for improve services. Customer just got a damage.

>> Companies must strengthen their IT security to improve services and protect their customers.

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