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2026-05-19 · 첨삭 강사 Cathy

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Hello Cathy! Happy Monday. Here comes a new week! I think everyone has their own desires in life. For example, as you mentioned, people may desire a wealthy life, good health, or success. In summary, I think everyone wants a life without worries. I think wanting a rich life is also a good thing. Because it can be another goal in life. Nothing motivates people as much as their goals in life. However, it is wrong to lose values or commit crimes to achieve that goal. Unjust achievements will eventually lead to responsibility, Like the situation in our company right now.

강사 첨삭

Hi Clark,

I really liked your answer. It’s clear, grounded, and very well thought out. You didn’t just talk about desire in a simple way; you gave it depth. The idea that people ultimately want a life without worries is very real, and the way you expressed it felt calm and sincere.

 

I also respect how you see wealth. Not as something negative, but as a goal that can motivate people. That’s a balanced perspective. And what stood out to me the most is your line about values. You were very clear: goals are important, but not at the cost of integrity. That kind of thinking doesn’t come from theory, it comes from experience.

 

I can sense that what’s happening around you at work is not easy. When reality doesn’t align with your values, it creates tension. But the fact that you can see it clearly and still hold your standards says a lot about your character. Not everyone does that. Keep going, Clark. You’re moving in the right direction.

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think everyone has their own desires in life. For example, as you mentioned, people may desire a wealthy life, good health, or success.

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OR>>I think everyone has different wants in life, such as financial stability, good health, or personal success.

In summary, I think everyone wants a life without worries.

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OR>>Overall, I believe most people simply want a life free from stress and concerns.

I think wanting a rich life is also a good thing. Because it can be another goal in life. Nothing motivates people as much as their goals in life.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe wanting a wealthy life is not a bad thing, as it can serve as a meaningful goal. Goals are often what motivate people the most in life.

However, it is wrong to lose values or commit crimes to achieve that goal.

>>CORRECT

OR>>However, it is never right to abandon your values or break the law in order to achieve those goals.

Unjust achievements will eventually lead to responsibility, Like the situation in our company right now.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Unethical success will eventually bring consequences and accountability, as we can see in our company’s current situation.

 

 

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