Homework.

2026-06-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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The best way to motivate people is through money. Do you agree? Explain your answer. I agree with that, but it is not all. In some cases the way to motivate people is through money is very effective. For example to have goal like to sell somethings. People like money incentive. These days many people want to and hope to earn money. So the best way and sure way is through money. But sometimes we want to another. When I was working we had to be promoted high position. To be promoted was hard thing. It was very happy, when I was promoted. So l think that to be promoted is good way to motivate people.

강사 첨삭

Hello Eva,

Thank you for your homework.

I do know that you have a great potential in expressing your answers. Continue to grow and develop your skills in this way for you will find yourself successful in the future with the help of God.

T. Jeny

>>I agree with that, but it isn\'t everything. In some cases, motivating people with money is very effective.
For example to have goal like to sell somethings. People like money incentive.

>>For example, to have a goal like selling something. People like money incentives.

These days many people want to and hope to earn money. So the best way and sure way is through money.

>>These days, many people want to and hope to earn money. So the best and sure way is through money.

But sometimes we want to another.

>>But sometimes we want to do something else.
When I was working, we had to be promoted to a high position.

>>When I was working, we had to be promoted to a high position.
To be promoted was hard thing. It was very happy, when I was promoted.

>To be promoted was a hard thing. I was very happy when I was promoted.

So l think that to be promoted is good way to motivate people.

>>So I think that being promoted is a good way to motivate people.

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