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What workplace benefit do you think is most important: higher salary, shorter working hours, or better health benefits? Why?
I think health is very important for me. because If I am not good at health, I cannot work and get money.
so I think It is important work balance. I want to have health. and I want to be free from illness.
so I hope to work for long time.
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[이름] [이름],
Thanks for sharing your ideas here.
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-T. Ash
I think health is very important for me. because If I am not good at health, I cannot work and get money.
>> I think health is more important for me because if I am sick, I won’t be able to work and earn money.
so I think It is important work balance.
>> That is why work-life balance is important.
I want to have health. and I want to be free from illness.
>> I want to stay healthy and be free from any illnesses.
so I hope to work for long time.
>> It’s because I want to work for a long time.
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