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2026-07-03 · 첨삭 강사 Ash

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What workplace benefit do you think is most important: higher salary, shorter working hours, or better health benefits? Why? I think health is very important for me. because If I am not good at health, I cannot work and get money. so I think It is important work balance. I want to have health. and I want to be free from illness. so I hope to work for long time.

강사 첨삭

[이름] [이름], 

Thanks for sharing your ideas here. 

See you!

-T. Ash


I think health is very important for me.  because If I am not good at health, I cannot work and get money.

>> I think health is more important for me because if I am sick, I won’t be able to work and earn money. 


so I think It is important work balance.

>> That is why work-life balance is important. 


 I want to have health. and I want to be free from illness.

>> I want to stay healthy and be free from any illnesses. 


so I hope to work for long time. 

>> It’s because I want to work for a long time. 


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