HOMEWORK
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
I’d like to get your opinion on mandatory personal finance classes for high s[이름]ol students. Some people believe this is a great way to get young people started on the path to good financial conditions. What do you think?
Some people argue that students in high s[이름]ol should take finance classes since ways of saving money and raising finance have nowadays become more and more complicated. However, in my opinion, I don\'t think that students need mandatory personal finance classes. To begin with, students can acquire sufficient financial knowledge on their own. There are a lot of resources for learning personal finance, such as books or YouTube videos. Second, I believe those classes should come after students learn basic economics and how society works. Through those classes, students can acquire basic concepts such as taxes, supply and demand and inflation, which helps students understand why learning money management skills is so important.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Well, that\'s impressive! I hope our education systems would take on that.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
Some people argue that students in high s[이름]ol should take finance classes since ways of saving money and raising finance have nowadays become more and more complicated.
~ Some people argue that high s[이름]ol students should take finance classes, as methods of saving money and managing finances have become increasingly complicated nowadays.
However, in my opinion, I don\'t think that students need mandatory personal finance classes.
~ CORRECT.
To begin with, students can acquire sufficient financial knowledge on their own.
~ CORRECT.
There are a lot of resources for learning personal finance, such as books or YouTube videos.
~ CORRECT.
Second, I believe those classes should come after students learn basic economics and how society works.
~ Second, I believe personal finance classes should come after students learn basic economics and how society works.
Through those classes, students can acquire basic concepts such as taxes, supply and demand and inflation, which helps students understand why learning money management skills is so important.
~ Through foundational economics classes, students can acquire basic concepts such as taxes, supply and demand, and inflation, which helps them understand why learning money management skills is so important.
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