Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, Alice!
I was sorry I turned off my camera yesterday.
I'm usually in bed shape when we meet because the time of my class is too late and I have to go to sleep after class. So I hope you understand it.
I did my homework and it's written below.
The most important thing in my life is honesty because if I don't be honest, I never have confidence. It means I will not succeed and I will be not happy. So I always try to don't lie to everyone. Another one I think importantly is what i want to do. I'd like to work what I like because I will keep going my career and I really want to be professionalist in my job. So when I got a new job, I considered work I will do more than the money. Finally I want to be happy and free, so I often think how to be happy.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
Thank you for making your homework. Very well said! ^^
I admire you for following your dreams and to choose a job where you really want to be. Honesty is indeed one of the most important values in life. Great! ^^
Anyway, I had talking with you tonight!
Enthusiastically,
~Teacher Alice
Hi, Alice!
>> Hi Alice!I was sorry I turned off my camera yesterday.
>> I was sorry I have turned off my camera yesterday.
>> OR I am sorry I turned off my camera yesterday.I\'m usually in bed shape when we meet because the time of my class is too late and I have to go to sleep after class.
>> I\'m usually in bad shape during our class time because our time is very late and I have to go to sleep after class. *Did you mean this way?
>> OR I\'m usually in my sleeping mode during our class time because our time very too late and I have to go to sleep after class.
So I hope you understand it.
>> Correct! *Of course! Not a problem. :)I did my homework and it\'s written below.
>> Correct!The most important thing in my life is honesty because if I don\'t be honest, I never have confidence.
>> Correct!
>> OR The most important thing in my life is honesty because if I won\'t be honest, I will never gain confidence.
It means I will not succeed and I will be not happy.
>> It means I will not succeed and I will be not happy if I lie.
So I always try to don\'t lie to everyone.
>> So I always try not lie to everyone.
>> OR So I always try to be truthful to everyone.
>> OR So I always try to be honest to everyone.
Another one I think importantly is what i want to do.
>> Another important thing for me is what I want to do.
I\'d like to work what I like because I will keep going my career and I really want to be professionalist in my job.
>> I\'d like to work in line with what I like because I will keep going through my career. I really want to be professional in my job. *Sure you will!
So when I got a new job, I considered work I will do more than the money.
>> So when I get a new job, I always consider my work and will work more than the money.
Finally I want to be happy and free, so I often think how to be happy.
>> Correct!
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