homework
학생이 쓴 원문
TO.Dianne.
I replayed the recording of our lesson.
On the phone, I didn't understand your last question.
But, through recording of a class, I understand your question.
you asked me "can we buy happiness by money"
The answer is sometimes "yes".
For example, frankly speaking, I wanna quit my job to take a rest.
But my situation related to money never allows me to do that.
In this case, the answer is "yes".
But some rich people sometimes try to suicide.
This shows that money is not all.
Now, I will write a my homework.
Absolutely, the real experience is much more precious than learning from school.
For example,even though some of people who get good scores in TOEIC, TOPLE,
they can't speak simple sentences with foreigner.
I think that this is not right education.
Back in the day, I am one of them.
I was afraid of talking to foreigner.
But real experiences to learn English from you, it makes me more fluently.
강사 첨삭
You always have great ideas and that is what I really like about you. I like the way you express yourself and I really respect your opinions. Keep your ideas coming! Have a great night and talk to you again tomorrow!
T. Dianne
TO.Dianne.>>To Dianne,I replayed the recording of our lesson.>>CorrectOn the phone, I didn\'t understand your last question.>>Correct OR:
>>I didn\'t understand your last question on the phone.But, through recording of a class, I understand your question.>>But, through the recording of our class, I understand your question.you asked me \"can we buy happiness by money\">>You asked me \"Can we buy happiness by money?\" Or:
>>You asked me \"Can money buy happiness?\" The answer is sometimes \"yes\".>>CorrectFor example, frankly speaking, I wanna quit my job to take a rest.>>Correct But my situation related to money never allows me to do that.>>Correct Or:
>>But my financial status does not allow me to do that.In this case, the answer is \"yes\".>>CorrectBut some rich people sometimes try to suicide.>> But some rich people sometimes try to commit suicide.This shows that money is not all.>>This shows that money cannot buy happiness at all times.Now, I will write a my homework.>> Now, I will write my answer to my homework.Absolutely, the real experience is much more precious than learning from school.>>CorrectFor example,even though some of people who get good scores in TOEIC, TOPLE, they can\'t speak simple sentences with foreigner.>>For example, even though some people get good scores in TOEIC, TOPLE, they can\'t speak simple sentences with foreigners.I think that this is not right education.>>I think that this is not a right education.Back in the day, I am one of them.>>Correct Or:
>>I am one of them before.I was afraid of talking to foreigner.>>I was afraid of talking to a foreigner. Or:
>>I was afraid of talking to foreigners.But real experiences to learn English from you, it makes me more fluently.
>>But real experiences to learn English from you, it makes me more fluent. Or:
>>But real experiences to learn English from you, it makes me speak fluently.
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