homework

The topic is what has been the most life-changing experience you've ever had? I think that staying in the military space for two years is the most life-changing experience. When I had been a soldier first day, I complained my position. Finally, When I had applied to there, I could change my character to be brave. I especially liked shooting training. If I completely shoot a target, I can receive vacation permits. After finishing the military period,I received higher score than yesterday when I return to my university.

Hi There, Louis!Wow! Another on time homework. Good job! Thank you so much for your composition today. I really had fun reading it. Hope you\'ll take note of the corrections and the explanation for each mistakes. Just let me know if you have any questions? Congratulations for a job well done! See you in class :) ~T. Kate^^ Here are my corrections for you: The topic is what has been the most life-changing experience you\'ve ever had? >> The topic for today is \"What has been the most life-changing experience you\'ve ever had?\" (Please take note on the capitalization of the word \"What\")I think that staying in the military space for two years is the most life-changing experience. >> I think the most life-changing experience I\'ve ever had, is by staying in the military space for two years. (Please take note on the sentence structuring) When I had been a soldier first day, I complained my position. >> When I was a soldier on our first day, I complained about my position. (Please be careful with your prepositions)Finally, When I had applied to there, I could change my character to be brave. >> Finally, when I applied there, I can now change my character to become a brave person.I especially liked shooting training. >> I enjoyed the shooting training so much.If I completely shoot a target, I can receive vacation permits. >> If I completely shoot a target, I will receive a vacation permit.After finishing the military period,I received higher score than yesterday when I return to my university. >> After finishing the military period, I received a higher score more than what I expected when I returned to my university.