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2012-07-23 · 첨삭 강사 karen

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Hi Karen!I apologize again for being late for your phone call. And thanks for teaching me as well! Well, I think I was so over-confident so I misjudged that I could get a high score at Toefl test after studying just one book for reading section. But it's not, so I'll study harder to achieve my goal with positive mind! Wish me a gook luck. Anyway Today's topic given to me is "If you can make a holiday, what would it be commemorating/celebrating and why?" I would make a holiay for environment, and call it "The day of saving". In this holiday, we tries to use less water,electricity and other resources.Also every countries in the world should get together to discuss the environmental problems in that day. Through that day, we could realize how much we consume our resources that are very limit, and that will be very helpful to resque rare animals and plants which are about to extinct because of the damage of environment. Have a nice day and see you on wednesday!

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sang Hwa! 

Thank you for making your homework. First of all, use this experience as a strong foundation so you can learn and be stronger. Every failure should be taken as a pillar that will make you firm ^__^ Mistakes are normal, but not learning from them is where the problem begins. On a different note, I would like to tell you how happy I am with your answer in tonight\'s homework. You see, I also love the environment and I kinda feel disappointed with what\'s happening right now. I hope someday people would be more responsible. I hope it would\'t take floods and typhoons to make humans learn. Anyway, I am hopeful that someday we\'ll have a \"Greener\" future ^__^ Take care Sang Hwa and call you again on Wednesday! 

~t.Karen (>.^___^<)

Hi Karen!

>> Correct! ^^ 

I apologize again for being late for your phone call.

>> I apologize again for being late in answering your call. 

And thanks for teaching me as well! 

>> Correct! ^^ 

Well, I think I was so over-confident so I misjudged that I could get a high score at Toefl test after studying just one book for reading section.

>> Well, I think I was so over-confident that I misjudged getting a high score in my TOEFL test after studying just the reading section of one book. 

But it\'s not, so I\'ll study harder to achieve my goal with positive mind!

>> But it\'s not true, so I\'ll study harder to achieve my goal with a positive mind! 

Wish me a gook luck.

>> Wish me good luck. 
Anyway Today\'s topic given to me is \"If you can make a holiday, what would it be commemorating/celebrating and why?\"
>> Anyway, today\'s topic that you\'ve given me is, \"If you can make a holiday, what would it be commemorating/celebrating and why?\".

I would make a holiay for environment, and call it \"The day of saving\".

>> I would make a holiday of the environment and call it \"The Day of Saving\". 

In this holiday, we tries to use less water,electricity and other resources.

>> In this holiday, we try to use less water, electricity and other resources. 

Also every countries in the world should get together to discuss the environmental problems in that day.

>> Also every country in the world should get together to discuss the environmental problems in that day. 

Through that day, we could realize how much we consume our resources that are very limit, and it will be very helpful to resque rare animals and plants which are about to extinct because of the damage of environment. 

>> Through that day, we could realize how much we consume our resources that are very limited and it will be very helpful to rescue rare animals and plants which are about to go extinct because of the damage in the environment. 

Have a nice day and see you on wednesday!

>> Have a nice day and see you on Wednesday! 

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