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2012-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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We earn our (life)in America today in peaceful (competition) with people all across the Earth. Profound and (powerful) forces are shaking and (making) our world, and the urgent question of our time is whether we can make change our friend and not our enemy. This new world has already (richen) the lives of millions of Americans who are able to(compete) and win in it. But when most people are working harder for less, when others cannot work at all, when the cost of health care devastates families and threatens to (bankrupt) our enterprises, great and small, when the fear of crime robs law abiding citizens of their(free), and when millions of poor children cannot even imagine the lives we are calling them to lead, we have not made change our friend.

강사 첨삭

Hi there! Thanks for your time and effort in doing what you are assigned to do. I believe that you can do more than this, make sure to check your mistakes. Below are your corrections. __T. Jane__   We earn our (life)in America today in peaceful (competition) with people all across the Earth. >>> We earn our /livelihood/ in America today in peaceful competition with people all across the Earth. Profound and (powerful) forces are shaking and (making) our world, and the urgent question of our time is whether we can make change our friend and not our enemy. >>>CORRECT This new world has already (richen) the lives of millions of Americans who are able to(compete) and win in it. >>> This new world has already /enriched/ the lives of millions of Americans who are able to compete and win in it. But when most people are working harder for less, when others cannot work at all, when the cost of health care devastates families and threatens to (bankrupt) our enterprises, great and small, when the fear of crime robs law abiding citizens of their(free), and when millions of poor children cannot even imagine the lives we are calling them to lead, we have not made change our friend. >>> But when most people are working harder for less, when others cannot work at all, when the cost of health care devastates families and threatens to bankrupt our enterprises, great and small, when the fear of crime robs law abiding citizens of their /freedom/, and when millions of poor children cannot even imagine the lives we are calling them to lead, we have not made change our friend.

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