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2012-08-13 · 첨삭 강사 karen

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I agree with the statement.I think our culture has developed for human beings never get fully satisfaction and that's because we are born to pursue more things, not only for superficial substance but also for one's spiritual acheivement. But I also believe that we could be satisfied as far as it goes. Happy,delightful condition of human comes from one's thought mixed some of satisfaction that is from things one has acheive and some of desirous hope to be more better one than before. So if we don't be a kind of greedy men who always complain about having little and damage others over line, we would be active men with unlimited challenge which is outgrowth of our nature that never want to stop being stagnant. Hi Karen! Is that answer too short?ㅜㅜI can't measure appropriate quantity of answer..Have a nice day and see you on Friday!

강사 첨삭

Hello hello there again Sang Hwa! 

You have done an exceptional job once again ^^. As a tip for you, try to be careful with the use of your adverbs / adjectives and be more mindful of your tenses. In terms of the length of your answer, it\'s actually okay. Just do remember to give specific examples to make to answer the question. Other than these mistakes, fantastic job! See you Friday and take care!

-t.Karen =^._____.^=  

I agree with the statement.

>> Correct! ^^ 

I think our culture has developed for human beings never get fully satisfaction and that\'s because we are born to pursue more things, not only for superficial substance but also for one\'s spiritual acheivement.

>> I think our culture has developed for human beings never get fully satisfied and that\'s because we are born to pursue more things, not only for superficial substance but also for one\'s spiritual achievement.

OR 

>> I think our culture has developed for human beings never get full satisfaction and that\'s because we are born to pursue more things, not only for superficial substance but also for one\'s spiritual achievement.

But I also believe that we could be satisfied as far as it goes.

>> Correct! ^^ 

Happy,delightful condition of human comes from one\'s thought mixed some of satisfaction that is from things one has acheive and some of desirous hope to be more better one than before.

>> Happy and delightful conditions of a human comes from one\'s thought combined with satisfaction from things he has achieved and from desirous hope to be better than before. 

So if we don\'t be a kind of greedy men who always complain about having little and damage others over line, we would be active men with unlimited challenge which is outgrowth of our nature that never want to stop being stagnant.

>> So if we aren\'t like greedy men who always complain about having little and damage others overboard, we would be active men with unlimited challenges resulting to us never wanting to be stagnant. 

Hi Karen!

>> Correct! ^^ 

Is that answer too short?

>> Correct! ^^

ㅜㅜI can\'t measure appropriate quantity of answer..

>> I can\'t measure the length of my answer. 

Have a nice day and see you on Friday!

>> Correct! ^^ 

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