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<Homework> My best childhood memory is when I was a student. Every spring and autumn, we are going to a school excursion. I reall enjoyed it. Because we are going to every where. One of the best place is theme park. When we arrived at theme park, we took a roller coaster. The roller coaster is indispensable thing in the theme park. And then I took a lot of photo with my friends. It was quite good memories. The next thing, in autumn, most of the trees are turning red. So that reason, a view of the mountain is wonderful. In the mountain, we played the game. The name is 'treasure-hunting'. :) I like it. The rule is simple, If we found a piece of paper, we will get a treasure. Most important thing is lunch box!!! My mom made me something different lunch box. Almost people brought their lunch box, the menu is 'kimbab', but my mom made me 'jumeokbab'. It is made from mixed rice and vegetables. It looks like a small ball. So I can eat at a mouthful. Anyway a school excursion is very special day to student. Because we don't have any class. We have a break. :) But the problem is, a school excursion is just 1day. So we have an unsatisfied feeling. I think a school excursion will be still important day to student.

Your childhood alone is a treasure that you need to keep for as long as you can. It is very inspiring :) I enjoyed reading it. I could distinctly imagine what it was like to be an excursion because of how detailed you described it on your composition. ^^ Keep it up!

T. Ritchel

My best childhood memory is when I was a student.

>>My best childhood memory was when I was a student.
Every spring and autumn, we are going to a school excursion.

>>Every spring and autumn, we usually go to a school excursion.
I reall enjoyed it. Because we are going to every where.

>>I really enjoyed it because we go to different places.
One of the best place is theme park.

>>One of the best places we went to is the theme park.
When we arrived at theme park, we took a roller coaster.

>>When we arrived at the theme park, we took a roller coaster.
The roller coaster is indispensable thing in the theme park.

>>The roller coaster is an indispensable thing in the theme park.
And then I took a lot of photo with my friends.

>>And then, I took a lot of photos with my friends.
It was quite good memories.

>>Correct!
The next thing, in autumn, most of the trees are turning red.

>>Next, in autumn, most of the trees turn red.
So that reason, a view of the mountain is wonderful.

>>For that reason, a view of the mountains is wonderful.
In the mountain, we played the game.

>>We played games on the mountains.

The name is \'treasure-hunting\'. :) I like it.

>>Correct!
The rule is simple, If we found a piece of paper, we will get a treasure.

>>The rule simple, if we found a piece of paper, we will get a treasure.
Most important thing is lunch box!!!

>>The most important thing is our lunch boxes!
My mom made me something different lunch box.

>>My mom made me something different and put it in my lunch box.
Almost people brought their lunch box, the menu is \'kimbab\', but my mom made me \'jumeokbab\'.

>>Almost all people brought their lunch box. The menu was \'kimbab\' but my mom made me \'jumeokbab\'.

It is made from mixed rice and vegetables.

>>Correct!
It looks like a small ball.

>>Correct!

 So I can eat at a mouthful.

>>So I can eat it one mouthful at a time.
Anyway a school excursion is very special day to student.Because we don\'t have any class.

>>Anyway, a school excursion is a very special day to students becuase we don\'t have any class.

We have a break. :)

>>Correct!
But the problem is, a school excursion is just 1day.

>>Correct!
So we have an unsatisfied feeling.

>>Correct!

>>So we feel unsatisfied.
I think a school excursion will be still important day to student.

>>I think a school excursion will still be an important day to students.