homework
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I disagree with it. For instant, We are always talk to about newest issue and a famous drama Which are watched last night When we meet friends, colleague in sc[이름]l, office. Next, Naturally do develop, build our relationships Through it.
In past, I was go abroad for about 6months, and get back here. At that time I met by friends, with out any the latest data, issue, trend. And I just had listen to conversation friends with a smile, I didn’t break into the conversation. It’s really bad thing to build communicate. We are now living in the 21st century and many of our life styles changed. Thus, We should change our way of thinking, have open minded to accept lots of the latest trend and communicate through it.
And In my opinion, TV boxes are no more just robot by can. They are the most important thing to live with others Smoothly and happily.
To Verna: Hi, I had to cancel our class, cuz private appointment. I’m looking forward to next class, thank a lot & See ya, tomorrow^^
강사 첨삭
Hi there!
I understand that you had to cancel our class because you have an appointment. It\'s okay.
That is a very good point. I would also say the television is very helpful to our lives. It provides us entertainment and it also serves as our source of issues or topics which we can use to communicate with others.
May you have a great night! I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Verna
I disagree with it.
>> I disagree with that.
>> OR I disagree with the statement.
For instant, We are always talk to about newest issue and a famous drama Which are watched last night When we meet friends, colleague in sc[이름]l, office.
>> For an instance, whenever my friends and I meet in sc[이름]l or in the office, we always talk about the newest issues or the famous Korean drama.
Next, Naturally do develop, build our relationships Through it.
>> We naturally develop and build our relationships through this. In past, I was go abroad for about 6months, and get back here.
>> In the past, I have gone to abroad for about 6 months and got back here.
At that time I met by friends, with out any the latest data, issue, trend.
>> At that time, I had met some friends and knew nothing about any latest issues or trends.
And I just had listen to conversation friends with a smile, I didn’t break into the conversation.
>> I just listened to their conversation while giving them a smile. I did not really get into their conversation.
It’s really bad thing to build communicate.
>> It\'s really a bad thing to build communication.
We are now living in the 21st century and many of our life styles changed.
>> We are now living in the 21st century and many of our life styles have already changed.
Thus, We should change our way of thinking, have open minded to accept lots of the latest trend and communicate through it.
>> Thus, we should change our way of thinking, be open-minded to accept various trends and communicate through it.
>> OR Thus, we should change our way of thinking, be open-minded to accept various trends trend and build relationship through it.And In my opinion, TV boxes are no more just robot by can.
>> And in my opinion, TV sets are not just machines.
They are the most important thing to live with others Smoothly and happily.
>> They are the most important things to live with others smoothly and happily.To Verna: Hi, I had to cancel our class, cuz private appointment.
>> OR To Verna: Hi, I had to cancel our class \'cause I had a private appointment.
I’m looking forward to next class, thank a lot & See ya, tomorrow^^
>> I\'m looking forward to our next class.Thanks a lot & see you tomorrow. ^^
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