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2012-08-20 · 첨삭 강사 karen

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Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. I certainly can say that my generation is quite different from previous in various ways. And among them, ethical aspect is distinct. Many people in my generation usually go to secondary school learning a lot of things unlike their parents, yet many of them graduate with their mind not prepared to run into strict society life.It's caused to new biased that people who don't achieve at least bachelor's degree, they are lazy or stupid so can not get a job. So they become brittle, and tend to be exposed to temporary fun life but at the same time dangerous such as one night stand with stranger. There are people who don't behave above, but important thing is the above people are increasing especially since my generation so it's urgent to set up their minds more stronger and help them get ready to prepare their ability to work. Hi Karen! I think it's too long..isn't it? ㅠㅠ Anyway see you about 5 minutes later !

강사 첨삭

Terrific job SangHwa! (=

Don\'t worry about the length of your answer. It\'s just right because I didn\'t include the articles in the count. Your answer is spot on! You are right, there are a lot of differences between the previous generation and our generation. We are more open minded to change, I think. It can be a good thing and it can also be a bad thing. Anyway, I totally agree with your answer. You were also able to give concrete examples, very well done. Anyway, talk to you on Wednesday. 

-t.Karen =^.^= 

Every generation of people is different in important ways.How is your generation different from your parents\' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

I certainly can say that my generation is quite different from previous in various ways.

>> I can certainly say that my generation is quite different from the previous generation in various ways. 

>> ** Don\'t forget your article \"The\" because you are talking about a specific generation which is the previous generation. 

And among them, ethical aspect is distinct. 

>> Correct! ^^ 

Many people in my generation usually go to secondary school learning a lot of things unlike their parents, yet many of them graduate with their mind not prepared to run into strict society life.

>>  Many people in my generation usually go to secondary schools, learning a lot of things unlike their parents, yet many of them graduate with their mind not prepared to run into the strict society life.

>> ** Don\'t forget to use a comma [ , ] to separate phrases/clauses.

>> ** Don\'t forget your article \"The\"

It\'s caused to new biased that people who don\'t achieve at least bachelor\'s degree, they are lazy or stupid so can not get a job.

>>  It caused a new bias, that people who didn\'t achieve at least a bachelor\'s degree are lazy or stupid so they can not get a job.

>> ** \"Biased\" is an adjective. Use the noun form instead, \"Bias\" which is described by the adjective \"New\". 

>> ** Don\'t forget your article \"A\" because you are talking about a random bachelor\'s degree. 

So they become brittle, and tend to be exposed to temporary fun life but at the same time dangerous such as one night stand with stranger.

>>  So they become brittle, and tend to be exposed to a temporary fun life, but at the same time dangerous such as one night stands with strangers.

OR 

>>  So they become brittle, and tend to be exposed to a temporary fun life, but at the same time dangerous such as a one night stand with a stranger.

>> ** Be specific with your count: Stranger/Strangers. 

There are people who don\'t behave above, but important thing is the above people are increasing especially since my generation so it\'s urgent to set up their minds more stronger and help them get ready to prepare their ability to work.

>>  There are people who don\'t behave in ways as I have stated above, but the important thing is that they are increasing especially  in my generation so it\'s urgent to set up their minds to be  stronger and help them get ready to prepare their ability to work.

>> ** When your superlative in the second degree ends in \"-er\", you don\'t need to add the word \"More\". Example:

-more prettier (wrong) and prettier (correct) 

Hi Karen!

>> Correct! ^^ 

I think it\'s too long..isn\'t it? ㅠㅠ

>> Correct! ^^

Anyway see you about 5 minutes later !

>> Correct! ^^ 

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