Homework :)
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<Homework>
The first thing that you have same liking as me.
When I talked with my friend, my friend's liking was same as me.
So we became intimate each other.
We don't have any problem.
Sometimes, another friend and I argued each other.
Because we don't have same liking.
For example, if I want to see a romantic comedy movie, but my friend don't
want to see that. She wants to a horror movie.
I know it is not a big problem, but I feel tired.
I don't want to argue with my friends and I don't want to see a horror movie.
So we have to choose one thing, that's why I prefer someone who has same liking as me.
The next thing is a personality.
It is very important thing.
I like who has a cheerful and positive personality.
Then I can change more positively, because I recieve a good influence
from my friend.
If we do something hard work, we can do it happily.
Because we have a breadth of mind.
The last thing that you trust me, and I trust you.
If we can not trust each other, maybe we are not friends anymore.
And I don't want to make a lot of best friends.
I need a true friend.
강사 첨삭
Hi! Great composition of yours. High five for that! You were able to express your thoughts well! Keep it up my dear^^ The things that you said are true. I hope that you have a great relationhip with friends.Take Care! Talk to you soon.
T.Ritchel
Here are my corrections for you:
<Homework>The first thing that you have same liking as me.
>>The first thing is that you have the same interest as mine.
OR >>The first thing is that we have the same interests.When I talked with my friend, my friend\'s liking was same as me.
>>When I talked with my friend,her interest was the same as mine.
OR >>When I had a conversation with my friend,we have the same interests.So we became intimate each other.
>>So we became intimate with each other.
OR >>So we had an intimate relationship.We don\'t have any problem.
>>CorrectSometimes, another friend and I argued each other.
>>Sometimes, another friend of mine and I argued with each other.
OR >>Sometimes my friend and I argued.Because we don\'t have same liking.
>>Because we don\'t have the same interest.
OR >.Because we don\'t have the same likes.For example, if I want to see a romantic comedy movie, but my friend don\'twant to see that.
>>Correct
She wants to a horror movie.
>>She wants a horror movie.I know it is not a big problem, but I feel tired.
>>CorrectI don\'t want to argue with my friends and I don\'t want to see a horror movie.
>>I don\'t want to argue with my friend and I don\'t want to see a horror movie.So we have to choose one thing, that\'s why I prefer someone who has same liking as me.
>>So we have to choose one thing,that\'s why I prefer someone who has the same interest like mine.
OR >>So we have to decide about it,that\'s why I prefer someone that our interest is the same.The next thing is a personality.
>>The next thing is about personality.It is very important thing.
>>It is an important thing.I like who has a cheerful and positive personality.
>>CorrectThen I can change more positively, because I recieve a good influence from my friend.
>>I will be more positive because I recieve a good influence from my friend.
OR >>Then I will have a positive perception towards life because I receive good influence from my friend.If we do something hard work, we can do it happily.
>>If we work hard,we do it happily.Because we have a breadth of mind.
>>CorrecftThe last thing that you trust me, and I trust you.
>>The last thing is about trust,you trust me and I also trust you.If we can not trust each other, maybe we are not friends anymore.
>>If we can\'t trust each other,maybe we can\'t be friends for long.
OR>>If we don\'t trust each other,pur relationship will not last.And I don\'t want to make a lot of best friends.
>>CorrectI need a true friend.
>>Correct
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