Homework :)

2012-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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<Homework> The first thing that you have same liking as me. When I talked with my friend, my friend's liking was same as me. So we became intimate each other. We don't have any problem. Sometimes, another friend and I argued each other. Because we don't have same liking. For example, if I want to see a romantic comedy movie, but my friend don't want to see that. She wants to a horror movie. I know it is not a big problem, but I feel tired. I don't want to argue with my friends and I don't want to see a horror movie. So we have to choose one thing, that's why I prefer someone who has same liking as me. The next thing is a personality. It is very important thing. I like who has a cheerful and positive personality. Then I can change more positively, because I recieve a good influence from my friend. If we do something hard work, we can do it happily. Because we have a breadth of mind. The last thing that you trust me, and I trust you. If we can not trust each other, maybe we are not friends anymore. And I don't want to make a lot of best friends. I need a true friend.

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Hi! Great composition of yours. High five for that!  You were able to express your thoughts well! Keep it up my dear^^ The things that you said are true. I hope that you have a great relationhip with friends.Take Care! Talk to you soon. T.Ritchel Here are my corrections for you: <Homework>The first thing that you have same liking as me. >>The first thing is that you have the same interest as mine. OR >>The first thing is that we have the same interests.When I talked with my friend, my friend\'s liking was same as me. >>When I talked with my friend,her interest was the same as mine. OR >>When I had a conversation with my friend,we have the same interests.So we became intimate each other. >>So we became intimate with each other. OR >>So we had an intimate relationship.We don\'t have any problem. >>CorrectSometimes, another friend and I argued each other. >>Sometimes, another friend of mine and I argued with each other. OR >>Sometimes my friend and I argued.Because we don\'t have same liking. >>Because we don\'t have the same interest. OR >.Because we don\'t have the same likes.For example, if I want to see a romantic comedy movie, but my friend don\'twant to see that. >>Correct She wants to a horror movie. >>She wants a horror movie.I know it is not a big problem, but I feel tired. >>CorrectI don\'t want to argue with my friends and I don\'t want to see a horror movie. >>I don\'t want to argue with my friend and I don\'t want to see a horror movie.So we have to choose one thing, that\'s why I prefer someone who has same liking as me. >>So we have to choose one thing,that\'s why I prefer someone who has the same interest like mine. OR >>So we have to decide about it,that\'s why I prefer someone that our interest is the same.The next thing is a personality. >>The next thing is about personality.It is very important thing. >>It is an important thing.I like who has a cheerful and positive personality. >>CorrectThen I can change more positively, because I recieve a good influence from my friend. >>I will be more positive because I recieve a good influence from my friend. OR >>Then I will have a positive perception towards life because I receive good influence from my friend.If we do something hard work, we can do it happily. >>If we work hard,we do it happily.Because we have a breadth of mind. >>CorrecftThe last thing that you trust me, and I trust you. >>The last thing is about trust,you trust me and I also trust you.If we can not trust each other, maybe we are not friends anymore. >>If we can\'t trust each other,maybe we can\'t be friends for long. OR>>If we don\'t trust each other,pur relationship will not last.And I don\'t want to make a lot of best friends. >>CorrectI need a true friend. >>Correct

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