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I don't think so I have a winter escapade becasue I'll be very busy for my baby. :-)
But anyway Korea has a winter that is the reason we have many winter sport like play skiing, skating, snowboarding and others. When I was elementary school student, my father played together ski. After that I like the ski so we went to play the ski lots of time. This year, also, I'm going to ski with my friends.
Actually, I and my wife don't like cold. We're going to holiday where is more warm than Korea. I know about the Philippines where is very beautiful place and consists of many islands. I went to there when I was 14th. I remember I told you befor our class about it. At that time, It's so impressive. So it's the one of the place what we going to have a holiday.
The other place is Hong-Kong, Vietnam and Guam.
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Hello, [이름]!
I\'m so excited for your baby... soon! I hope that you will have a healthy baby. Anyway, I\'m quite impressed with the winter plans that you have. How I wish I could go skiing and experience other fun winter activities that your country has to offer. For the meantime, have a great day and I\'ll call you again tomorrow.
I don\'t think so I have a winter escapade becasue I\'ll be very busy for my baby. :-)>>I don\'t think I\'ll be having a winter escapade because I\'ll be very busy taking care of my baby.But anyway Korea has a winter that is the reason we have many winter sport like play skiing, skating, snowboarding and others.
>>Anyway, Korea has winter season that\'s why we have many winter sports like skiing, skating, snowboarding and others.
When I was elementary school student, my father played together ski.
>>When I was an elementary school students, me and father plays ski together.
After that I like the ski so we went to play the ski lots of time.
>>Since then, I liked ski so we go play ski lots of times.
This year, also, I\'m going to ski with my friends.>>This year, I\'m also going ski with my friends.Actually, I and my wife don\'t like cold.
>>Actually, me and my wife don\'t like the cold weather.
We\'re going to holiday where is more warm than Korea.
>>We\'re going somewhere for our holiday where it is warmer than Korea.
I know about the Philippines where is very beautiful place and consists of many islands.
>>I know the Philippines is a very beautiful place and it consists of many islands.
I went to there when I was 14th.
>>I went there when I was 14.
I remember I told you befor our class about it.
>>I remember I told you before in our class about it.
At that time, It\'s so impressive.
>>During that time, it looks so impressive.
>>At that time, I was impressed with the scenery.
So it\'s the one of the place what we going to have a holiday.
>>So, it\'s one of the places that we\'re planning to go to this holiday.The other place is Hong-Kong, Vietnam and Guam.
>>Other places would be Hong Kong, Vietnam, or Guam.
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