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<Homework> When I was 10 years old, I went to the camp. In the camp programme, there is a training, its for courage. The rules are simple. First, some teachers hide in the forest. And when we started this training, teachers come out unexpectedly. At the same time we will surprise, but we have to go to the final place. If we arrive at the final place, we have to bring a stamp. Lastly we have to come back to start place. Then, this training is finished. If it takes for a short time to finish, we will get some gifts. Because we are win! But the problem was when we walked in the forest. Some teachers, they make up for a ghost. It makes me feel like crying. :( Because I am really scared about a ghost. At that time I was young, also I was surprised because of them. Finally I cried. For that reason, I couldn't go to the final place. So one of the teachers, she took me into a room. Anyway I am still remember that and I will never forget. I don't want to do it again.

Hello there! Thank you for sending a composition..You write in an interesting way so it was fun reading what you wrote. Please be careful with your tenses. See you in class. T. Ritchel   <Homework>When I was 10 years old, I went to the camp. >> When I was 10 years old, I went to a camp.In the camp programme, there is a training, its for courage. >>In the camp programme, there was  a training, its for courage.The rules are simple. >> The rules were simple.First, some teachers hide in the forest. >>First, some teachers  hid in the forest.And when we started this training, teachers come out unexpectedly. >>And when we started this training, teachers came out unexpectedly.At the same time we will surprise, but we have to go to the final place. >> Eventhough we were surprised, we had to go to the final place.If we arrive at the final place, we have to bring a stamp. >> When we arrived at the final place, we had to bring a stamp.Lastly we have to come back to start place.>> Lastly, we had to go back to the starting point. Then, this training was finished. >> correct or >> After that, the training was finished.If it takes for a short time to finish, we will get some gifts. >> If it took us a short time to finish, we would receive gifts.Because we are win! >> Because we won!But the problem was when we walked in the forest. >> correctSome teachers, they make up for a ghost. >> Some teachers played up as ghosts.It makes me feel like crying. :( >> It made me feel like crying.Because I am really scared about a ghost. >> Because I was really scared of ghosts.At that time I was young, also I was surprised because of them. >> correct or >> At that time, I was young and I was also surprised because of them.Finally I cried.>> Finally, I cried. For that reason, I couldn\'t go to the final place. >> correctSo one of the teachers, she took me into a room.>> So one of the teachers took me to her room. Anyway I am still remember that and I will never forget. >> Anyway, I can still remember that and I can never forget it.I don\'t want to do it again. >> correct