Homework :)

2012-09-03 · 첨삭 강사 Ritchel

학생이 쓴 원문

<Homework> We have a special holiday in Korea. The first thing is that we called it 'seolnal'. The meaning of the seolnal, it is the lunar New year's day. Normally at the lunar New year's day, we bow deeply to our elders. For example, grandmother, grandfather, mother, father, uncle and aunt. Then, they give us a little amount of money. At that time, we usually wear the Korea traditional clothes. But these days, many people don't wear this clothes. Because it is a quite cumbersome to wear. We called this clothes 'hanbok'. I like it!!:) This clothes is really beautiful. When you have a chance to wear the Korea traditional clothes, yuo have to wear. Because if you wear this clothes, you can get a special experience. Let's talk about the food. At that day, we always eat rice-cake soup with some dumplings. When we prepared some foods, we made dumplings. It is painstaking work to make dumplings. But I like dumpling! :p The last thing is about the game. We play this game at the lunar New year's day. We called this game 'yutnori'. First, throw four bars with hand. The shape of bar, it looks like a rectangle. Anyway it is a good game for family.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! Wow, I learned a lot from your essay. Okay! I will try to wear the Korean traditional costume ones I have a chance. ^^ Thank you for sharing that to me. It is highly appreciated. ^^ By the way, next time focus on the topic. The homework is about the Korea\'s culture and not holiday. Nevertheless, you did a good job. Be reminded also of the Subject-Verb agreement okay? ^^Happy weekend! T.Ritchel We have a special holiday in Korea. >>CORRECTThe first thing is that we called it \'seolnal\'. >>The first one is what we call \"Seolnal\". >>OR:First, we call it \"Seolnal\".The meaning of the seolnal, it is the lunar New year\'s day. >>Seolnal means the Lunar New Year\'s Day.Normally at the lunar New year\'s day, we bow deeply to our elders.For example, grandmother, grandfather, mother, father, uncle and aunt. >>Normally during the Lunar New Year\'s Day, we bow to our elders such as our grandmother, grandfather, mother, father, uncle and aunt.Then, they give us a little amount of money. >>CORRECTAt that time, we usually wear the Korea traditional clothes. >>On that day, we usually wear the Korean traditional clothes.But these days, many people don\'t wear this clothes.Because it is a quite cumbersome to wear. >>Although many Koreans do not wear this traditional clothes anymore because it is quite cumbersome to wear. We called this clothes \'hanbok\'. I like it!!:) >>We call this clothes \"Hanbok\". I like it!:)This clothes is really beautiful. >>These clothes are really beautiful.When you have a chance to wear the Korea traditional clothes, yuo have to wear. >>When you have a chance to wear the Korean traditional clothes, wear it!Because if you wear this clothes, you can get a special experience. >>You can have a special exprerience when you wear them.Let\'s talk about the food. >>Let\'s talk about food. At that day, we always eat rice-cake soup with some dumplings. >>During that day, we always eat rice-cake soup with some dumplings. When we prepared some foods, we made dumplings. >>We make dumplings when we prepare some foods.It is painstaking work to make dumplings. >>CORRECTBut I like dumpling! :p >>CORRECTThe last thing is about the game. >>Lastly is the game.We play this game at the lunar New year\'s day. >>We play this during the Lunar New Year\'s Day. We called this game \'yutnori\'. >>CORRECT!First, throw four bars with hand. >>First, you have to throw four bars with your hand.The shape of bar, it looks like a rectangle. >>The shape of the bar looks like a rectangle.Anyway it is a good game for family. >> Anyway, it\'s a good game for the family.    

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