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I think it's necessary for country. And nowadays, some university women students apply for the army in their school because getting job is more difficult since depression is more serious. Army is kind of goverment official that is very good saving money, lots of benefit for official, if you get the job more than 20 years, when you retire you'll give the pension. So, every year women's apply is inreasing. Isreal women must go to army as I know, so what women going to army is proper in Korea also.

Hello there, [이름]! Thank you so much for your wonderful explanation towards women joining the army. I think practicality wise, joining the army may not be a bad idea at all.  Anyway, the corrections are below so you can check them out anytime. Have a wonderful day! I think it\'s necessary for country. >>CORRECT >>I think joining the army is necessary for one\'s  country. And nowadays, some university women students apply for the army in their school because getting job is more difficult since depression is more serious. >>Nowadays, some women who are still studying in the university apply for the army in their schools because getting a job is more difficult since the recession is more serious.Army is kind of goverment official that is very good saving money, lots of benefit for official, if you get the job more than 20 years, when you retire you\'ll give the pension. >>Being in the army is like working as a government official. It is a good way to save money, the official will get lots of benefits. If you are in the service for more than 20 years, you will get a pension when you retire. So, every year women\'s apply is inreasing. >>So every year, the women\'s application is increasing. >>So women applying for the army are increasing.Isreal women must go to army as I know, so what women going to army is proper in Korea also.   >>Women from Israel must join the army, as I know, so women going to the army is proper in Korea also.