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When I was 25 before, I didn't interested in the politics but I'm very interested in it now.
Changing the high rank officer appoinment law is on my first list. This goverment of many top rank officers didn't go army when they was a young not only president but those. How can they manage about the Ministry of Defense? It doesn't make sense.
Limiting the commit an irregularity person is on my second list. Member of Congress should be a purity who don't have any crime, sexual assault and tax delinquency.
Intensifing the law of violent crimes is on my last list. When violent crimes occured, the penalty is very lower. I think it's nessasary to be strong.
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Good morning, [이름]!
I think you made a very keen observation with regards to the Korean government. In general, we really do need good leaders who can implement good laws for the people so that they can experience peace and order in their respectable countries. Have a great day! I\'ll see you in class.
When I was 25 before, I didn\'t interested in the politics but I\'m very interested in it now.
>>When I was 25 years old, I was not interested in politics not like now.Changing the high rank officer appoinment law is on my first list.
>>Changing the high ranking office who appoints the law is first on my list.
This goverment of many top rank officers didn\'t go army when they was a young not only president but those.
>>This government who has a lot top ranking officers didn\'t go to the army when they were young, I am not only talking about the president but also the others.
How can they manage about the Ministry of Defense?
>>How can they manage the Ministry of Defense?
It doesn\'t make sense.
>>CORRECT!Limiting the commit an irregularity person is on my second list.
>>Limiting the commitment of a common citizen is second on my list.
Member of Congress should be a purity who don\'t have any crime, sexual assault and tax delinquency.
>>Members of the Congress should be pure. They haven\'t commited any crime, sexual assault and/ or tax delinquency.Intensifing the law of violent crimes is on my last list.
>>Intensifying the law against violence is the last on my list.
When violent crimes occured, the penalty is very lower.
>>When violence occurs, the penalty given is very low.
I think it\'s nessasary to be strong.
>>I think it\'s necessary to be strong.
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