Homework\
학생이 쓴 원문
Though you can make a decision on purely economic grounds, buying a computer is often more like joining the religious cult. Buy the Apple, for example, and almost by default you join Apple chairman Steve Jobs in his crusade against IBM. Every machine has its "users' groups" and the band of loyal enthusiasts who tout its merits. That makes it all the more difficult for an uninitiated to decide what machine to buy. Students have a huge advantage, however. The computer companies are so eager for students' business (it builds "brand loyalty") that many offer huge discounts.
강사 첨삭
Hello there! ^^ You have a wonderful opinion about computers. But we cannot deny the fact that we need most especially nowadays. Technology somehow runs our everyday living which has a disadvantage as well. ^^ See you in our next class. ^^
~ T. Nica
Though you can make a decision on purely economic grounds, buying a computer is often more like joining the religious cult.
>>Although you can argue purely on the economic grounds, buying a computer is often more likely to be joining a religious cult.
Buy the Apple, for example, and almost by default you join Apple chairman Steve Jobs in his crusade against IBM.
>>When you buy the Apple, for example, it is almost by default that you are joining the Apple chairman Steve Jobs in his crusade against IBM.
Every machine has its \"users\' groups\" and the band of loyal enthusiasts who tout its merits.
>>Every machine has its user groups and the band of the loyal enthusiasts who tout for its merit.
That makes it all the more difficult for an uninitiated to decide what machine to buy.
>>That makes it more difficult for an uninitiated to decide what machine to buy.
Students have a huge advantage, however.
>>However, the students benifit from it.
The computer companies are so eager for students\' business (it builds \"brand loyalty\") that many offer huge discounts.
>>The computer companies are so eager to have the students\' market (it builds \"brand loyalty\") that many offer huge discounts.
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