Homework 19
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. Can money buy happiness?
A. Money can\'t buy happiness but it does have a great impact on happiness. I think money is very important in my life. If I\'m poor, I would be very much depressed, because I would have to always think about my money to buy something or eat something. Besides, market price goes up faster than our salary does. The price of coffee has already reached to the previous one for the meal in five years ago while our salary stays still. Money can\'t buy happiness but it can ward off unhappiness coming from poverty. As I don\'t want to get by on small money when I retire, I\'m trying to think of how to increase my income for my silver life such as studying investment.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bomi! Thank you for catching up with your homework. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
Good thoughts. I definitely agree with you. Money is a tool to achieve once happiness but not the sole thing that can make one person happy. Some people are happy living a simple life as long as they have three meals a day and are healthy. Sometimes what makes people unhappy is that they try to compare themselves to others, thanks to social media that magnifies people\'s way of living making others feel insecure or less fortunate. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
Money can\'t buy happiness but it does have a great impact on happiness.
>>CORRECT
I
think money is very important in my life.
>>CORRECT
If I\'m poor, I would be very
much depressed, because I would have to always think about my money to
buy something or eat something.
>>If I\'m poor, I would be very
much depressed, because I would always have to think where to get money to buy food and other necessities.
Besides, market price goes up faster
than our salary does.
>>CORRECT
The price of coffee has already reached to the
previous one for the meal in five years ago while our salary stays
still.
>>The price of coffee has increased so much compared to how much it was five years ago but unfortunately our salary stays the same.
Money can\'t buy happiness but it can ward off unhappiness coming
from poverty.
>>CORRECT
As I don\'t want to get by on small money when I retire,
I\'m trying to think of how to increase my income for my silver life such
as studying investment.
>>CORRECT or
>>As I don\'t want to get by with only a small amount of money when I retire, I\'m trying to think of ways on how to grow my money exponentially such as studying on investments.
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