Homework#19
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi,Teacher! Typhoon \"Ling Ling\" is coming soon to our contries. :( So, the National Weather Service said that it will rain a lot today..
HW#19 How can we make the world a better place to live in?
I think that making something better should be required to make a lot of effort.
So, making the world a better place also needs such things.
I believe the best way of them is communication.
The better places mean that many people are satisfied with them.
If our communication system is well-configured, we can know what we want things that make me us satisfied as communicating each other.
In conclusion, what i\'m trying to say is that an integrated language using technology like AI, automatic translator give us the better world.
If that happens, we could communicate with all people in the world easily. And we would make the world we want to live in better
강사 첨삭
Hi Jonathan!
Take good care of yourself. Be safe. Don\'t go out without your umbrella.
Here are my corrections.
I think that making something better should be required to make a lot of effort.
>>I think that making something better requires a lot of efforts.
So, making the world a better place also needs such things.
So, making the world a better place also needs such things.
>>Correct!
I believe the best way of them is communication.
I believe the best way of them is communication.
>>I believe the best way for it is communication.
The better places mean that many people are satisfied with them.
The better places mean that many people are satisfied with them.
>>Better places means that many people are satisfied with it.
If our communication system is well-configured, we can know what we want things that make me us satisfied as communicating each other.
If our communication system is well-configured, we can know what we want things that make me us satisfied as communicating each other.
>>If our communication system is well-configured, we can know what we want like things that make us satisfy as we communicate to each other.
In conclusion, what i\'m trying to say is that an integrated language using technology like AI, automatic translator give us the better world.
In conclusion, what i\'m trying to say is that an integrated language using technology like AI, automatic translator give us the better world.
>>In conclusion, integrated language using technology like AI and automatic translator can make the world better.
If that happens, we could communicate with all people in the world easily. And we would make the world we want to live in better
If that happens, we could communicate with all people in the world easily. And we would make the world we want to live in better
>>If that happens, we could communicate with all of the people in the world easily. And we would make the world we want to live in better.
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