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Korea has a problem that is low birth. Many people don't want to baby or want just one kid since not only spend much money in order to raise a baby but strong bad behavior like rape, violence and something like that. But, world population is more growing now. I think it is affected by poor country like Africa. I saw TV which most of African's birth 5 children at least. Because to have many children is very important for them to their agriculture. If it happened more and more, water, oil, natural gas and tree etc, is more fast spend. So we should find a alternative energy for us and our children.

Hello there, [이름]! Happy Monday! I hope that you had a great weekend. Thank you so much for finding time to have for your composition. You did an impressive job. Please check out the corrections I made below. Have a wonderful day ahead and take care! Korea has a problem that is low birth. >>Korea has a problem and that is low child birth. Many people don\'t want to baby or want just one kid since not only spend much money in order to raise a baby but strong bad behavior like rape, violence and something like that. >>Many people don\'t want to have a baby or would just like to have one child since they won\'t be spending too much money while raising the kid. They would also like their kid to be aware of bad behaviors such as rape, violence and more.But, world population is more growing now. >>World population is growing more now. I think it is affected by poor country like Africa. >>I think this affects third world countries like Africa. I saw TV which most of African\'s birth 5 children at least. >>I saw on TV that most Africans give birth to at least 5 children. Because to have many children is very important for them to their agriculture. >>The reason behind that is having many children is very important for them with regards to agriculture.If it happened more and more, water, oil, natural gas and tree etc, is more fast spend. >>If this happens, more water, oil, natural gases, trees, etc., will spent fast. So we should find a alternative energy for us and our children. >>We should find an alternative energy for us and our children.