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Seoul is one of the big city in all of the wolrd. So, traffic jam is very serious especially, rush hour is not to mention.
I think about the reason that we have a car manufacture company which Hyundai and Kia motor. We can buy more reasonable price than improt car like BMW and AUDI.
Second, Korea GDP is so high that peopel can buy car more and more.
That's the why we always have a traffic jam.
But our transportation system is very good. Many foreigners satisfied our bus and subway system. Because it's so comfortable, no complicated for foreigners. They have lots of language like English, French, Duestch, Japanese and Chinese. So, they can select one of them. And we have a good transfer system. One of my Japnese friend told transfer system is very compact, comfortable compared to Japan.
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Seoul is one of the big city in all of the wolrd.
>>Seoul in one of the biggest city in the world.
So, traffic jam is very serious especially, rush hour is not to mention.
>>Seoul is one of the biggest city in the world. Problems about traffic is very serious especially in rush hours.
I think about the reason that we have a car manufacture company which Hyundai and Kia motor.
>>I think one of the reason why we have traffic is because, Korea has a manufacturing company like Hyundai and Kia motors.
We can buy more reasonable price than improt car like BMW and AUDI.
>>We can but it in a reasonable price than other imported cars like BMW and AUDI.
Second, Korea GDP is so high that peopel can buy car more and more.
>>In addition, Korea\'s GDP, is also hight that\'s why people can buy more cars.
That\'s the why we always have a traffic jam.
>>This is the main reason why we experience traffic.
But our transportation system is very good.
>>correct
Many foreigners satisfied our bus and subway system.
>>Many foreigners are satisfied with our bus and subway system.
Because it\'s so comfortable, no complicated for foreigners.
>>Because it\'s comfortable and not complicated for them to understand.
They have lots of language like English, French, Duestch, Japanese and Chinese.
>>It features different kinds of languages like English, French, Duestch, Japanese and Chinese.
So, they can select one of them. And we have a good transfer system. One of my Japnese friend told transfer system is very compact, comfortable compared to Japan.
>>So they can select and understand. We have a good transfer system. One of my Japanese friend told one that, the transfer system in Korea is compact and comfortable compared to Japan.
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