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2016-02-02 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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The war killed many people. The soldiers as well as the civilians unrelated to the war,especially children, women and the elderly, are sacrifice. Korea participated in Vietnam war in the 1960's and 1970's. Many civilians were massacred during the operations carried out by Korean military. But Korea government has denied that. The sacrifice soldiers received compensation from their country, civilians are not receiving any compensation. Korea government have to acknowledge the fact that a civilian massacre, and have to indemnify for them. We established a volunteer organization called "Medics for Vietnam and Peace(MVP)" to urge Korea government to apologize and compensate. It is a private, non-profit,non-governmen organization. Every year since 2000, MVP has done medical activities to visit the area where massacre happened. I am currently working as a founding member of the MVP. I'm planning to go to Vietnam in March this year.

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Hi there Sir [이름]!   Thank you so much for sharing this. I only know little about the Vietnam war. I guess, you are doing a lot of volunteer work. Please continue a lot of people. Good job! See you later!   ~Teacher Shanee   The war killed many people. >>> Correct!The soldiers as well as the civilians unrelated to the war,especially children, women and the elderly, are sacrifice.>>> Soldiers as and even civilians unrelated to the war, including children, women and elderly, were sacrificed. Korea participated in Vietnam war in the 1960\'s and 1970\'s. >>> Korea participated in the Vietnam war in 1960s and 1970s. Many civilians were massacred during the operations carried out by Korean military. >>> Correct! [the Korean military] But Korea government has denied that. >>> But the Korean government denied that. The sacrifice soldiers received compensation from their country, civilians are not receiving any compensation. >>> The sacrificed soldiers received compensation from their country but the civilians did not receive anything. Korea government have to acknowledge the fact that a civilian massacre, and have to indemnify for them. >>> The Korean government has to acknowledge the fact that they have to take responsibility and indemnify the victims.We established a volunteer organization called \"Medics for Vietnam and Peace(MVP)\" to urge Korea government to apologize and compensate. >>> We established a volunteer organization called \"Medics for Vietnam and Peace (MVP) to urge the Korean government to apologize and compensate.It is a private, non-profit,non-governmen organization. >>> It is a private, non-profit organization. Every year since 2000, MVP has done medical activities to visit the area where massacre happened. >>> Every year since 2000, MVP has visited the area where the massacre happened and done medical activities there.I am currently working as a founding member of the MVP. >>> Correct!I\'m planning to go to Vietnam in March this year. >>> Correct!

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