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Hi, Steve!
Thank you for sharing your ideas about the given question.
I do agree with you. For others, exercising is a way to relieve stress.
Is it also your stress reliever? ^^
Anyway, I hope you had a great day today.
_Teacher Dianne ^^
**Should employers set aside time during the day for their employees to exercise? What might be some of the advantages or disadvantages of this?
>> correct
I think it’s really advantages for employees and even employers.
>> I think it’s really advantageous for both employees and employers.
Of course employers think doing exercise waste their working time but first of all, it’s the way to relieve their stress for emplyees and make them get refresh after exercise.
>> Of course, employers think doing exercise is a waste of their working time, but first of all, it’s the way for the employees to relieve their stress and make them feel refreshed after exercising.
And then, if they’ll be healthy by exercise, they couldn’t need to take a rest from the illness.
>> And then, if they’ll be healthy by exercising, they don\'t need to take a rest from illnesses.
>> OR: And then, if they’ll be healthy through exercising, they won\'t easily infected by illnesses.
It gives them 100% body and more focus on the works.
>> It gives them a 100% healthy body and they will be more focused on their tasks.
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