homework 2.22

2018-02-23 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

What I want to get the most is a new lap top. My laptop is a bit old. It has been 4 years since I got it, and the condition of the laptop went bad so that sometimes it doesn't work. And also, I'm on my third year now and I have a lot of assignments and group project which need laptop. So I often need laptop when I'm in my school, but mine is too heavy to bring it to the school. So I want more light one but normally price of laptop is too expensive and I don't have enough money to buy it. But I don't want to ask my parents to buy it for me since I'm not a child and anyway I have a laptop. So several years later, if I have a chance, I hope I can get a new one.

강사 첨삭

Hi!^^

Thank you for sending this in. I hope that you could purchase a new laptop since you really need it.

Have a good day!

~Kelly^^

What I want to get the most is a new lap top.

>> What I want to get the most is a new laptop.

My laptop is a bit old.

>> Correct.

It has been 4 years since I got it, and the condition of the laptop went bad so that sometimes it doesn\'t work.

>> It has been 4 years since I got it, and the condition of the laptop went bad that\'s why sometimes it doesn\'t work.

And also, I\'m on my third year now and I have a lot of assignments and group project which need laptop.

>> Also, I\'m on my third year now and I have a lot of assignments and group projects which need a laptop.

So I often need laptop when I\'m in my school, but mine is too heavy to bring it to the school.

>> So I often need a laptop when I\'m in my school, but mine is too heavy to bring it to school.

So I want more light one but normally price of laptop is too expensive and I don\'t have enough money to buy it.

>> So I want a lighter one but normally the price of a laptop is too expensive and I don\'t have enough money to buy one.

But I don\'t want to ask my parents to buy it for me since I\'m not a child and anyway I have a laptop.

>> But I don\'t want to ask my parents to buy it for me since I\'m not a child anymore and anyway I already have a laptop.

So several years later, if I have a chance, I hope I can get a new one.

>> Correct.

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