homework 2.22
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi!^^
Thank you for sending this in. I hope that you could purchase a new laptop since you really need it.
Have a good day!
~Kelly^^
What I want to get the most is a new lap top.
>> What I want to get the most is a new laptop.
My laptop is a bit old.
>> Correct.
It has been 4 years since I got it, and the condition of the laptop went bad so that sometimes it doesn\'t work.
>> It has been 4 years since I got it, and the condition of the laptop went bad that\'s why sometimes it doesn\'t work.
And also, I\'m on my third year now and I have a lot of assignments and group project which need laptop.
>> Also, I\'m on my third year now and I have a lot of assignments and group projects which need a laptop.
So I often need laptop when I\'m in my school, but mine is too heavy to bring it to the school.
>> So I often need a laptop when I\'m in my school, but mine is too heavy to bring it to school.
So I want more light one but normally price of laptop is too expensive and I don\'t have enough money to buy it.
>> So I want a lighter one but normally the price of a laptop is too expensive and I don\'t have enough money to buy one.
But I don\'t want to ask my parents to buy it for me since I\'m not a child and anyway I have a laptop.
>> But I don\'t want to ask my parents to buy it for me since I\'m not a child anymore and anyway I already have a laptop.
So several years later, if I have a chance, I hope I can get a new one.
>> Correct.
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